- This is better, I like the change of pace in the performance part
- Is the text that appears the right font?
- Is the ending slow and the shot too long?
- Maybe include a slow zoom at the beginning of the performance part
- For the typed email try using a font that you are using in your ancillary
Focus Group Feedback:
Amy -
- I like the text on the screen as it made it more clear what was happening
- I like how there are less shots of her in costa as it allows you to focus on the narrative better
- The lip syncing was good and in time and made is appear as if the actress was actually signing
- To improve you could use colour grading to balance out the brightness of certain shots
- Maybe try including more interesting transitions such as cutting on the beat
Rhiannon -
- I love the use of diegetic sound at the beginning
- I also like how there are more shots of her playing the guitar
- To improve I would like to see some more performance elements and shots
Ben -
- It fits the music really well
- I like the story it tells as it is clear
- To improve have text when she gets the email in the coffee shop so it is easy to understand the message of the email
Joe -
- I like the text and how it appeared like it was being typed or read
- I like that you included more shots of her playing the guitar
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